Monday, November 14, 2011

Would like some feedback on my story?

your prologue doesn't seem to have anything to do with the person in your first chapter. men don't gush. people in Brooklyn don't call their mom Mum. black haired people -are- brunettes. i don't like reading parental lectures, or listening to them by that matter. 15 year-olds aren't in sororities. you misspelled words.

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